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PostPosted: August 21st, 2005, 5:46 pm 
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Name:Trap Undomiel
Age:1,000
race:Elf
Gender: Male
Weapons: Sword,bow
Profession:Elf price
History: When trap was three he was spade from Elond's son his father. Though he is a young Elf price He helps rule Rivendell.
(Is that good)

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Hmm...well, that certainly is an interesting character brego, but if you don't mind, may I give you a few quick pointers? :hide: I know, I know, but it's just a few things that might help your character to be a bit more realistic...

One is the name. Trap is all right, but the name "Undomiel" is a female name. "Iel" in Elvish is a female name suffix, and it was Arwen's last name. So I don't know if that will, help I just thought I'd mention it...

Oh, and Elrond could not have had any other children after Arwen, especially one that is 1,000, without having another wife. And I really don't think he would ever do that. So maybe if you made him a bit older, that would help. Say, maybe 2,000 something?

Like I said, just a few pointers to take note of if you want to. I'm sorry if I'm being annoying again. :guilty:

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PostPosted: August 21st, 2005, 10:46 pm 
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Great Elfish ok yea I will change that Trap Denure, and *thinks* is not reled to Elond but is an Elf price,He is Elond son's son. Dose that make sence. Gose of to change that and then works on Elfish.

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PostPosted: August 22nd, 2005, 1:53 pm 
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Hey, that looks very good brego! *thumbs up* That does indeed work very well. And nice last name too! :bye2:

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