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Post subject: I Love You  Posted: January 17th, 2007, 12:33 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
Posts: 19521
Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Well, I don't usually write free verse but that is just how this one turned out. Hope you all like it.
Something,
Nothing,
One thing,
Everything.
A kaleidoscope of good and evil,
That spirals down the banks of the rivers.
It turns the waters to blood,
And none escape it's claws.
Death,
Life,
Barely living,
Barely dead.
A haunting image of love and hate,
A bleeding image of sorrow cold.
But on it's tongue are words so cruel,
As it bends down and whispers, "I love You."
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Post subject: Posted: January 21st, 2007, 9:02 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
Posts: 3132
Location: The Shire
Gender: Female
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i like it....a lot....it's very....idk, interesting. u dont usually do free verse...i think this is the 1st 1 that i've ever read that u've done, & i really like it...i luv how it ends w/ i luv you....-shivers- it gives me chills....excellent job, as usual.  keep it up  _________________ 
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: January 21st, 2007, 9:25 pm |
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Joined: 30 March 2006
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Jax... why did you put this in the Misc. Randomness....
_________________  "Holmes is a little too scientific for my tastes -- it approaches to cold-bloodedness"
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Post subject: Posted: January 22nd, 2007, 1:30 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
Posts: 19521
Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
Gender: Male
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Thanks pip. Glad you liked it. Like I said though... it just kind of flowed out that way so i wrote it down in free verse. And I do believe that it is the first one I have done.
Weeziey wrote: Jax... why did you put this in the Misc. Randomness....
..... I saw that in here and asked myself the same question.... I was sure I posted this in the poetry section. Yeah shows you what a 3 nights lack of sleep can do for you!
I guess I will ost../. RE- post it in the poery sction. (just wait some how it will end up being the LOTR_RPG section... *sighs* gish...
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Post subject: Posted: January 22nd, 2007, 2:55 pm |
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Joined: 21 August 2006
Posts: 4076
Location: Out Walking
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That was confusing. But really neat at the same time.
Like me. Minus the neat part.
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Post subject: Posted: January 23rd, 2007, 5:11 am |
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Joined: 25 November 2006
Posts: 680
Location: India
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I really liked it in a weird kind of way. The way you ended it, it gave me creeps.*shivers* It was nice though.
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Post subject: Posted: January 25th, 2007, 2:48 pm |
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Joined: 04 January 2007
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Location: netherland
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I like it... just beautiful... just a little bit.. ehm... weird? strange?
what ever. I like it! 
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Post subject: Posted: January 26th, 2007, 1:23 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
Posts: 19521
Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
Gender: Male
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lol yeah, it is a bit strange I will admit that....
But I am strange so I am told and I always like strange things *shrugs* Strange isn't it? lol ok shutting my trap now,
But glad you all liked it!
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Post subject: Posted: January 28th, 2007, 5:47 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
Posts: 3132
Location: The Shire
Gender: Female
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Rnt we all strange, though? if we werent, we'd be.....normal. ew. tee hee. once again, great poem Jax. keep it up _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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