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Post subject: Small poetry stories (feedback would be appreciated) Posted: July 29th, 2006, 8:01 pm |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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I don't remember you
When I look in your face, you're like a stranger.
When I look in the mirror, I can't see my face.
Is this me?
I can't remember.
What happened? You left me and later, I left myself.
I'm laying here now. And I don't know why.
Who are you? Who?
I can't find the answer.
I know it, but it's far away.
Too far for me. I can't see it.
Why have you left me?
I don't know. And why are you coming back now?
Is it love? A warm feeling.
Like a breeze on a summer day.
The wind is whispering through the leaves.
I have my peace...
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: July 29th, 2006, 8:19 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006 Posts: 3132 Location: The Shire
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it's different.......like nothing i've ever read before. i like it. a lot. i really liek it. keep writing! 
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Post subject: Posted: July 29th, 2006, 10:44 pm |
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Joined: 02 July 2006 Posts: 3070 Location: Hitch-hiking to Vegas
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*hugs gollum* Darling, it's wonderful! *puts lampshade on head and dances rejoicefully*
Sam*winks*
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Post subject: Posted: July 30th, 2006, 4:25 am |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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I'm glad you like it. I'll post more soon! 
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: July 30th, 2006, 10:20 am |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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Like I promised...here's another one:
Where are you now?
I've lost you before, I've found you.
And now, I've lost you again.
Forever?
I don't know your place now.
Are you happy here?
Do you miss me? Do you remember me?
The world is dark for me.
You've gone. I can't reach you.
Talk to you, take you in my arms.
Or say sorry...
I know we'll meet again.
Somewhere, somehow, someday.
On the place you like.
And you'll smile...like you used to.
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: July 30th, 2006, 11:16 am |
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Joined: 08 January 2006 Posts: 3132 Location: The Shire
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Oh, i really like that! once again, buetimos!!!  *hugs*
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Post subject: Posted: July 30th, 2006, 3:10 pm |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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Thank you. You don't know how I appreciate this. You all should feel honoured. I didn't even tell my mom that I'm writing such things. (No, I don't know why I write this sad things, this just came in my head)
Here's another one:
Don't look for me
I've had my reasons to go, it wasn't you.
Don't be sad, one day you'll understand.
When you find me again, please don't lead me back to you
I don't want to hurt you
Not again.
This world isn't important...not anymore
I'm not your slave, I can go where I want.
You don't posses my life, I can let it go...whenever I want
You've to understand
I belong to myself-not to you
Once you'll understand...I'm sure
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: July 30th, 2006, 3:16 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006 Posts: 3132 Location: The Shire
Gender: Female
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same here....my mom knows i write poetry, but not wut i write about. lol & i like sad poems....that's wut i write, 2.
this is prob. my fav. 1 u've written. idk y......i just really like it. totally awesome job!! Keep it up!! 
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Post subject: Posted: August 2nd, 2006, 11:10 am |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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Okay, here's another one:
Where are you?
I can't see you, I can't feel you I can't hear you.
You're gone forever
Was it my fault? It's too hard to say; it's all gone what was worth living for. It was you...
Do you know how it is...when everything you've ever known...you've ever loved... was gone?
Then, you've begin living another life again
Always keep fighting
Fighting for your love...fighting for the future
Never giving up...
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: August 2nd, 2006, 11:33 pm |
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Joined: 26 July 2006 Posts: 38
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So much questions, so less answers...
(I like your poetry, and I can't wait for more  )
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On and on, does anybody know what we are living for? Whatever happens, we leave it all to chance...
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Post subject: Posted: August 16th, 2006, 9:12 am |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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Wow, I haven't posted for ages, sorry.
Here's another one:
Lost...alone...gone.
It's a circle of hopelessness
You can't escape it, when you want, you don't know you're already in.
In this circle of dead
This circle of being forgotten one day
If you don't want to be forgotten, don't forget yourself
Don't forget who you are and stay to your point
Don't change yourself, or you would be forgotten
Not special anymore, slowly, but sure, you'll turn into a copy of society
Just like anyone else.
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: August 16th, 2006, 12:49 pm |
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Joined: 26 July 2006 Posts: 38
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Yeap, another good one 
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On and on, does anybody know what we are living for? Whatever happens, we leave it all to chance...
THE SHOW MUST GO ON!
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Post subject: Posted: August 18th, 2006, 1:06 pm |
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Joined: 14 July 2006 Posts: 2652 Location: Rivendell, of course
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They're wonderful, gollum!  I really like your style.
And I'm looking forward to further stories...
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Post subject: Posted: August 22nd, 2006, 2:38 am |
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Joined: 19 August 2006 Posts: 1983 Location: The Middle Earth. Country:
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Wow nice Poetries , I am weeping my tears cause of the lost one wow , I felt it on my heart & I can use it as my daily Moto
_________________  Married Dean Winchester 3/18/13 (est. 2005)
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Post subject: Posted: August 22nd, 2006, 1:33 pm |
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Joined: 03 July 2006 Posts: 1743
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Thank you! I really appreciate it when my creavacy is appreciated (If that made sense  )
Here's another one:
Nothing's left.
No hope, no joy, no future.
No love.
For us the world is over.
Maybe a new one will start soon.
When we go over the rainbow, we'll find it.
And we'll find each other again.
It will be raining. You'll sit under a willow tree.
Like the first time we met.
Love at first sight is rare; you have to fight for your your love, for freedom...and peace.
But this world isn't important anymore.
I'll leave. And I'll never come back.
You have to promise me one thing...keep fighting.
_________________ Come to the Dark Side...we have Jim Moriarty
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Post subject: Posted: August 22nd, 2006, 2:47 pm |
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Joined: 19 August 2006 Posts: 1983 Location: The Middle Earth. Country:
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Wow so nice Poetry  , I AM your Biggest fan 
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