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Author: | Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 3:47 pm ] |
Post subject: | Face to the Sky |
Hey, this is the first poem I've really written ever, so it might not be that great. But there it is. For my whole life And I can't say why I kept my face away from the sky I never allowed the light on my face And now I know that I made a mistake 'Cause now I'm looking up at the sky And as I walk I wonder why I stayed in the dark so long Because now with you inside my heart Things are all different I've made a new start And I know I'm safe And I know I'm loved And I'll always belong With you in my heart Jesus I feel that nothing can go wrong Tell me what you think, guys. ^_^ |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:08 pm ] |
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aw, i liek that! it's so sweet! I can realte............perfect!! Keep it up & def. keep writing.........awesome for your first!!! ![]() ![]() |
Author: | Guest [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:20 pm ] |
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its great, Jack!!!!!!! ![]() ![]() |
Author: | Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:54 pm ] |
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Thanks. ^_^ I was trying to get to sleep last night, and it was just kinda, 'poof'. So I scribbled it down. Spur of the moment kind of thing. |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ September 23rd, 2006, 6:00 pm ] |
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*nods* I get those a lot. I luv it! You should def. write more. ![]() ![]() ![]() |
Author: | ethelfleda [ September 23rd, 2006, 7:59 pm ] |
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that's really good - you should definitely keep writing. it'd make a nice song too, if you can write music or know anyone who can. my best poems come like "poof" in the middle of the night when i can't sleep too, so i can identify with your method as well as the actual poem. |
Author: | Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 9:23 pm ] |
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I have some friends in the church band at this youth group thing that I do... maybe I could talk to them. ^_^ |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ September 24th, 2006, 8:13 pm ] |
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yha u should! ![]() ![]() |
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