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Face to the Sky
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Author:  Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 3:47 pm ]
Post subject:  Face to the Sky
Hey, this is the first poem I've really written ever, so it might not be that great. But there it is.

For my whole life
And I can't say why
I kept my face away from the sky
I never allowed the light on my face
And now I know that I made a mistake
'Cause now I'm looking up at the sky
And as I walk I wonder why
I stayed in the dark so long
Because now with you inside my heart
Things are all different
I've made a new start
And I know I'm safe
And I know I'm loved
And I'll always belong
With you in my heart Jesus
I feel that nothing can go wrong

Tell me what you think, guys. ^_^
Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:08 pm ]
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aw, i liek that! it's so sweet! I can realte............perfect!! Keep it up & def. keep writing.........awesome for your first!!! :-D :bye2:
Author:  Guest [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:20 pm ]
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its great, Jack!!!!!!! :) :D
Author:  Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 5:54 pm ]
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Thanks. ^_^

I was trying to get to sleep last night, and it was just kinda, 'poof'. So I scribbled it down. Spur of the moment kind of thing.
Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 23rd, 2006, 6:00 pm ]
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*nods* I get those a lot. I luv it! You should def. write more. :-D Let me know when (not if!! :-P) you do.....i'd like 2 read more!! :-D
Author:  ethelfleda [ September 23rd, 2006, 7:59 pm ]
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that's really good - you should definitely keep writing. it'd make a nice song too, if you can write music or know anyone who can.

my best poems come like "poof" in the middle of the night when i can't sleep too, so i can identify with your method as well as the actual poem.
Author:  Captain Jack [ September 23rd, 2006, 9:23 pm ]
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I have some friends in the church band at this youth group thing that I do... maybe I could talk to them. ^_^
Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 24th, 2006, 8:13 pm ]
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yha u should! :-D that'd be really cool!!! :-P
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