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Post subject: Drifting Posted: October 11th, 2006, 12:44 pm |
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Loose upon the wind
No attachment, nowhere to hold.
All there is, is wandering.
All that happens is free
No chain to restrain, no ropes to resist
All there is, is wandering, and all there is, is to drift
The tides wash along,
And the seas rise and fall
The wind shifts sighing,
And the sand moves without call.
The sunlight falls on the breeze.
Onwards to move through the mist
All there is, is to drift.
A branch held by the flow,
The ripple, tumbling by
The rock, washing away.
And no hands to press down.
Loose upon the wind, free to fly
All there is, is wandering, and all there is, is to drift!
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Post subject: Posted: October 11th, 2006, 12:48 pm |
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Joined: 28 January 2006 Posts: 762 Location: England
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Oohh... why don't you write more bloody poetry? -pokepokepoke- o_O;; This is very shiny.. I like the way it's descriptive, but not overly.. it conjours up a vivid sense of loss.. for me, any way. 
_________________ Those who find ugly meanings, in beautiful things, are corrupt without being charming. This is a fault. -Oscar Wilde-
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Post subject: Posted: October 11th, 2006, 3:23 pm |
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I don't write more poetry, because without feeling inspired, my poetry is rubbish. I need to feel motivated to write. And I felt that I had to write that out, and to give shape to one of my random thought patterns. I actually wrote it as it came to me. And it has not been edited, apart from typos 
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Post subject: Posted: October 11th, 2006, 4:51 pm |
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Joined: 01 August 2006 Posts: 265
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There something really nice about that peom. I like it!
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Post subject: Posted: October 11th, 2006, 4:56 pm |
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it. But i was wondering, what is it you like? If I know that, then I can try and include it in my future writing. 
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Post subject: Posted: October 11th, 2006, 6:06 pm |
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Joined: 01 August 2006 Posts: 265
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Quote: The tides wash along, And the seas rise and fall The wind shifts sighing, And the sand moves without call. The sunlight falls on the breeze. Onwards to move through the mist All there is, is to drift.
I like that verse in particular for some reason. I just like the style and the way that you rhyme things.
_________________ Formerly known as Leonder
http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1090576/ be sure to check out my LOTR stories!
 I'm not obsessed, honest, not obsessed, not obsessed.... I LOVE LOTR!!!!!!!!! Okay, maybe I am obsessed.
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Post subject: Posted: October 12th, 2006, 3:29 am |
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Joined: 28 January 2006 Posts: 762 Location: England
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Darrell wrote: I don't write more poetry, because without feeling inspired, my poetry is rubbish. I need to feel motivated to write. And I felt that I had to write that out, and to give shape to one of my random thought patterns. I actually wrote it as it came to me. And it has not been edited, apart from typos 
Ooohh, well.. it works very shinily. ^^;
It flows well, and it has a nice pattern to it... and the word use is nice.
-nodnodnodnod-
Strange poems are -always- more fun.. ^^;;
_________________ Those who find ugly meanings, in beautiful things, are corrupt without being charming. This is a fault. -Oscar Wilde-
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Post subject: Posted: October 12th, 2006, 9:55 pm |
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Joined: 03 June 2005 Posts: 13144 Location: Heaven: Rockin' with Severus Snape Country:
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Very well written Darrell! I'm not much of a poetry writing person my self, but I can tell when someone has written something good. 'Twas very descriptive, but not overly much, just enough to give me a sense of drifting myself.
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Post subject: Posted: October 13th, 2006, 12:19 pm |
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Why thank you Larael!  I'm glad you think it is good!
It would seem that you all liked the vague descriptiveness in it  I'll remember that, and use it in the future. I feel a couple more poems swirling in the deeps, that may surface at some point  No telling when that will be though...
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