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Post subject: Hold Me Close (G)  Posted: February 5th, 2007, 12:01 pm |
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idk where this came from...i wrote it randomly the other day in english class, so, yea....just let me know wut u think....
Hold me close,
Tell me it's all okay.
Tell me you love me,
And you'll never go away.
Lie to me if you must,
Just make me believe
That with you, I am safe;
For once, I need not grieve.
For my heart has been so broken;
So hurt and so abused.
I feel so empty and so alone;
So hurt and so confused.
So hold me close, my darling;
Tell me you love me.
Give my broken heart some hope;
Hear my pathetic plea.
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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: February 5th, 2007, 2:35 pm |
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Nice job.  Ryms well and flows. ..
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Post subject: Posted: February 5th, 2007, 5:29 pm |
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thanks, Jax  _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: February 5th, 2007, 11:07 pm |
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Great work pip! I love the rhythm to the piece. It is also very eloquently expressed. Great job and keep it up!:)
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Post subject: Posted: February 6th, 2007, 2:02 pm |
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thanks, Elenriel. i appreciate it _________________
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Post subject: Posted: February 6th, 2007, 2:40 pm |
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True, very well expressed and has good emotion.
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Post subject: Posted: February 6th, 2007, 5:05 pm |
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well, there's def. a lot of emotion behind it....as usual. lol so thanks. _________________
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Post subject: Posted: February 7th, 2007, 3:53 pm |
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lol yeah. But it comes out well in the poem I think.
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Post subject: Posted: February 9th, 2007, 9:47 pm |
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thanks, Jax. that means a lot. it really does. _________________
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Post subject: Posted: February 10th, 2007, 11:26 am |
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Only speaking honestly.
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Post subject: Posted: February 14th, 2007, 2:45 pm |
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aw, thanks  _________________
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Post subject: Posted: February 15th, 2007, 12:39 pm |
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Post subject: Posted: February 16th, 2007, 12:11 pm |
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Very well done....Kinda reminds me of how I have been feeling lately....very nicely presented and expressed
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Post subject: Posted: February 17th, 2007, 4:39 pm |
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thanks. i'm sry u can relate though....it's not the best feeling in the world. _________________
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Post subject: Posted: February 19th, 2007, 11:38 am |
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WOW!!! I love this poem....it's very expressive, I think deserves publishing!
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Post subject: Posted: February 19th, 2007, 5:49 pm |
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Eruwaedheil wrote: Very well done....Kinda reminds me of how I have been feeling lately....very nicely presented and expressed
Yea it does but it's a little easier knowing you're not the only one whos having a rough time.....Not that it's good for anyone to be having a rough time or anythiing _________________ Formerly Eruwaedhiel
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