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Author: | Narien [ July 24th, 2005, 1:28 am ] |
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I have a couple of poems and a short story um...thing. This one was my very first, so please...um yeah.. Is Love as hard as it would seem? or maybe it just exists in My Dreams. Waiting by the window as each day passes His keen brown eyes so fair they need no glasses! The princes hair a pure golden brown, and you'll hardly ever see him frown! His long slender hands to hold his bow, If I'm ever in danger he'll slay My foe. Always wishing and Hoping for that day to come, I sit on my bed facing the window, and start to hum Just as i start my sweet melody, He peers in the window smiling at me. rushing into the room and holds me tight, I look into his bright shining eyes and Oh! what a sight! He lifts me up and bares me away, Is this the end one would say. This may be the end for you, but for Me it seems, Its only in My Lovely Dreams Second one (not finished) A young man and a young woman, walking on the moonlit beach. saying nothing, doing nothing but holding hands. A light, cool breeze rustles the palm tree leaves, and shifts their hair around like feathers in the wind. The moon light above is glowing brightly against the dark, night sky.stars twinkled like diamonds in the velvety sky. Slowly walking, hardly talking, they wandered along the soft sand.He clasped her soft, warm hand in his own. She looked up at his radiant brown eyes, with her own dazzling blue gaze, her eyes seemed to smile at him when ever she glanced at him. and Third (also not finished) The Dreams...horrible.. The Thoughts....scary.. I dont know where to turn, I am trapped somewhere, in a tiny room, with nothing but bitter darkness. I am a shadow...almost invisable.. always wandering....seeking.. No one takes notice...always alone... no one understands you... but you keep going in darkness.... ....always waiting for the sun to come up... Always Alone.... and the Short story thingy. She wandered through the high dark grass, taking out the hair band, she let hair fly free in the gentle wind that surrounded her. The dark blonde hair moved softly back and forth flying aimlessly into her moon lit face. Moving her hand up and down in rhyme with the long grass, she strayed further and further away. Deeper and deeper into the night. In the distant a lone wolf howls into the cold. It stopped for a moment to listen for the return call, but nothing came. He kept crying mournfully into the dark. She shuddered a bit but kept listening to the wolves sad calls. Darkness crept over the land covering everything into a dark purple and navy shade. Thanks for reading! and please comment ![]() Närién |
Author: | Guest [ July 24th, 2005, 3:25 pm ] |
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Oh, a wonderful poet you are! The first one seemed really heartfelt, as if you really were longing after a boy. The second poem, although unfinished, seemed to me like a dream almost. Like yourself, when you are older. The third one is really different from the first two, but it still says something. And I think you really have something going with that short story. ^___^ I hope you'll take some constructive criticism? Lord knows, that I really need to get it. >_< In the first poem, in a few lines it seemed like you had a hard time rhyming ...I have the same problem...X_X You're a great writer, keep it up! |
Author: | brego145 [ July 25th, 2005, 8:32 pm ] |
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Love comes by:brego145 Love comes its like mist past though the air you don't feel it you don't hear it it just comes Life by:brego145 Life is like water that flows down a waterfall falling down just falling never stopping |
Author: | Lady Dark Moon [ July 26th, 2005, 12:51 pm ] |
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you're both very good poets! Närién, I like the way you describe love |
Author: | Narien [ August 25th, 2006, 1:54 pm ] |
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Wishing On A Star When you wish upon a star, all your dreams are swept afar. Traveling through the endless nights, with the moon shining through the cold twilight. Wishes, Thoughts and Wondrous Dreams, come to me from bright golden beams. A quiet breeze awakes my Mind, outlining everything that comes designed. Stepping out from the colorless void, Into a world of everything enjoyed. I've come a long way from the destruction's and such, Up to the very shining stars I can touch. Forgetting all my anxiety and troubled stress, staring in wonder at the power they posses. Back on ground where the grass tickled my feet, I lay down in the warm summer heat. Drifting in and out of sleep, Bringing back memories that forced me to weep. A sudden hand startled my tears, I looked up and restrained my fears. Out of the sunlights bright golden beams, appeared the man in my deep vivid dreams. His coal black hair as dark as night, the smile he wore, so warm and so bright. He offered his hand then told me his name, I took it so gently then whispered the same. He questioned why I was crying, Shaking my head, I stood there denying. He drew me up and took me away, laughing and grinning in the warmest of days. I woke up soon after, smiling with pleasure, I'd always remember that sweet simple treasure. 'Cause when you wish upon a star, all your dreams are swept afar. |
Author: | Sidawethiel [ August 30th, 2006, 1:32 am ] |
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Lalala, this belongs in "Fanfiction and Poetry", since it is afterall poetry! Whee! *nudges it to the poetry section* Cheers! [x] Sidawethiel |
Author: | Narien [ August 31st, 2006, 12:30 pm ] |
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k, thanks! |
Author: | Aramel Elyanwe [ December 9th, 2006, 10:03 pm ] |
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They're very beautiful, Närién! |
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