So I attempted to write a poem. But I don't really have any clue how to... so it's not that great. :/

Any advice/critique/tips on how to make it less terrible would be much appreciated!

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Arisen at dawn, the red sun appears,
A bright flame in the sky.
Flying above the land, nothing it fears,
Shining down from the height.

Awakened at dusk, the darkness crawls out,
To make war on the light.
Walking in shadow, it cloaks all in black,
Reigning throughout the night.

As the light fades, dark seems to win the fight.
Clouds cover the night sky,
But far beyond there, stars are glowing bright.
The light will never die.

In defiance of the dark the light shines,
Piercing through the deepest,
Darkest places, giving all things new life.
Can the darkness its strength best?

Never-ending is the battle they fight,
The darkness and the light.
Unrelenting, war rages on and on,
Until the end of time.

And then the light will overcome the dark,
Destroying its power.
The sun once more will arise to the sky,
Shining on forever.

I really like it! Now, from what I know of poetry, you can basically do your own thing and it's poetry. But from what I know of Shakespeare and verse and stuff like that, there are generally rhythms and patterns within verse. If you consciously thought of it while composing, it might help you feel like it's "better".

For example, your first lines of the stanzas are:
da DA da da DA / da DA da DA (da being less stress and DA being more stress)
aRISen at DAWN / the RED sun apPEARS
aWAKEned at DUSK / the DARKness crawls OUT

but then you shift it --
As the light fades, dark seems to win the fight
AS the light FADES / dark seems to WIN the FIGHT
to keep the same meter, you might consider saying ---
and AS the light FADES / dark WINS the FIGHT

Same with your second line:
da DA da DA da DA --first three stanzas, but then you get to "Piercing through the deepest" which, if done in the same meter, becomes:
pierCING through THE deepEST
see how it doesn't flow that well? You could try:
a SHAFT of LIFE to SHOW/
blah blah you'd have to rewrite the next line obvs because it wouldn't make sense anymore, but you get the gist.

Like I said, poems don't HAVE to do this, but it's a useful tool for structured poetry. You could always look up Shakespeare or iambic pentameter for more coherent stuff than I can say.

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going on a journey through my old claims

Thanks for replying, Nurr!
I'd say "oh that makes perfect sense" but I'd be lying.
Hehe I wasn't even thinking about the rhythm or anything... I just wrote it. But yeah... better rhythm would be good.
*tries to think of ways to make it run smoother*