If I was a queen
I would no longer weep
If I was a queen
No more would I sweep
For all the day long do I care for the king
And all the night long of queen do I dream
I know it sounds foolish
From way up there
But to I YOU look foolish
From way down here
If I was a queen they would think no such things
For only my kindness
They would lift up and sing
So now am I queen
At least in my dreams.
So what do you all think? I'm only thirteen but I would like to know if it sounds stupid or lame. Be honest with me, I plan on showing this to a lot of people. Thanks guys.

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"Not all those who wander are lost."

It's not bad. Though the first 2 lines are kinda silly... I mean, /everyone/ goes through hard times, even people in high places.

But you're off to a good start.

Ok, you're right there. It's just like a figure of speach, that this person who's saying this believes that it'd be better as queen. Because she doesn't know that it's hard too. She just wants to be higher up than the servant of the king. But yeah, I'll have to work on that. Thanks for the imput.

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"Not all those who wander are lost."

Ahh, ok. So she's kind of ignorant.
You're welcome. XD I can't wait to see what else you come up with.

Yeah. Thanks, I have written another poem. I wrote it after my grandpa died. I'll PM it or post it if you want to see it.

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"Not all those who wander are lost."

I'm so sorry about your grandpa.
I'd like to see it... if you feel it's too personal to let the whole forum see, I'm fine with a PM.