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| Author: | Jax Nova [ January 23rd, 2006, 2:42 pm ] |
| Post subject: | "Welcomed Death" (a short poem) |
Pleas inform me of what you think of this poem. Thanks! [font=Arial, sans-serif]Welcome Death[/font] "O death, where is thy sting?" "O grave, where is thy victory?" Death's cold hand has passed me by, And hope has come to this entity. Death, refrain your cold hand, Night, hold your cries of death. Grave, hold your lingered souls, Life, let forth your final breath. In the grave forevermore? Do not fear, stand, be brave. Welcome death with open arms, Christ has overcome the grave! |
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| Author: | Guest [ January 24th, 2006, 5:47 pm ] |
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neat. The only thing I have to say is that it doesn't really flow. Other then that it was great |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ January 24th, 2006, 6:11 pm ] |
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Yeah. I have to agree with you. It doesn't flow that well. Thanks for the comment and advice! |
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| Author: | Tar-Vanimelde [ January 30th, 2006, 1:17 am ] |
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It really depends on the way you say it. I could make it flow without chaning it at all. |
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| Author: | Shadowstorm [ January 31st, 2006, 12:14 pm ] |
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Mhm, it's the amount of syllables in the lines, they're unequal when you speak it...although I agree with Tar-, it depends completely on how you say it. |
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| Author: | Tar-Vanimelde [ February 1st, 2006, 1:40 am ] |
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Yeah, that's what I meant, I'm glad you got it, cause I'm not sure if I got it completely. |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 1st, 2006, 3:07 pm ] |
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lol well thanks for the imput. |
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| Author: | Tar-Vanimelde [ February 2nd, 2006, 2:46 am ] |
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You're welcome. |
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