^ Yes, I'm the same way. I love reading it, but I'm no good at writting it!! Jax, you're going to have to write poetry more often to satisfy the rest of us, since you're so good at it.
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ January 27th, 2006, 3:00 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Alone. (a short Poem) |
Alone When all around you care so much, And life goes on each day. But those around can't calm your mind, And you slowly drift away. What then can I do alone, To keep them close to me? While still trying to heal my hurt, And be what I ought to be? When each night brings sorrows hiden, From all there eyes to see. At tears flow down out of sight, That no sees but God and me. Sometimes to talk to somone close, would bring my night to day. But all I have is devinity, To here each time I pray. Granted He is there for me, Without him I am dead. But I need somone that I can see, as well, not instead. |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ January 28th, 2006, 2:21 pm ] |
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Wow, that is a really beautiful poem, Jax Nova. I really like it. |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ January 28th, 2006, 5:28 pm ] |
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Thanks. Appriciate the complements. If anyone out there has any advice to help me improve please feel free to give it out!! |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ January 30th, 2006, 8:52 pm ] |
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i really like that. that's a really good poem. |
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| Author: | Shadowstorm [ January 31st, 2006, 12:13 pm ] |
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I really like it as well, Jax. You should write poetry more often, it's gorgeous! |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ January 31st, 2006, 8:58 pm ] |
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ya, seriously. i luv poetry, & ur is REALLY good!! this is my favorite: When each night brings sorrows hiden, From all there eyes to see. At tears flow down out of sight, That no sees but God and me. Sometimes to talk to somone close, would bring my night to day. But all I have is devinity, To here each time I pray. Granted He is there for me, Without him I am dead. But I need somone that I can see, as well, not instead. i luv poetry. i could NEVER wirte it lol, but i luv 2 read it. |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ January 31st, 2006, 9:11 pm ] |
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^ Yes, I'm the same way. I love reading it, but I'm no good at writting it!! Jax, you're going to have to write poetry more often to satisfy the rest of us, since you're so good at it.
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 1st, 2006, 3:09 pm ] |
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lol. Well I love to write it so I don't gota problem with that. I'm glad you like it! And I think you could write poetry if you realy practiced enough.. you should see... well shouldn't see... some of the stuff I wrote when I first started... it was horible. lol |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ February 2nd, 2006, 8:27 pm ] |
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no, u dont wanna see my poems. lol mine r like: this is matt he is a cat he sat on a hat then ate a rat lol. seriously they suck. but I LOVE to read poems!!! (if they rn't my crappy 1's, of course.  ) i luv the 1's in the LotR books & luv this 1 u wrote!!!
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 2nd, 2006, 9:14 pm ] |
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lol. Well that's what mine were like when I first started. Just keep writing and you will get better. Glad you like it though. |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ February 3rd, 2006, 6:46 pm ] |
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ya.....i dont think poetry's 4 me. lol u keep writing 'em, & i'll keep reading 'em & wishing i could write 'em, k? lol
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 3rd, 2006, 6:52 pm ] |
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lol well... If you injoy it I don't think it matters whether you are good at it or not. |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ February 3rd, 2006, 6:57 pm ] |
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i'll stick w/ music. i dont really like writing it, but i do luv reading it, so lt me know when u've got a new 1!!
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 3rd, 2006, 7:05 pm ] |
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Well there is one down there somewhere called "Freedom's Cry." |
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| Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ February 20th, 2006, 12:02 pm ] |
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I luv this poem so much, I went back through all of the poems & read this one again!!! I luv all of your writing, but this is definately my favorite. I guess it's because I can relate to it. I totally understand wut you mean & I feel the same way. I luv the last stanza. (sp?)
Granted He is there for me, Without him I am dead. But I need somone that I can see, as well, not instead. as well, not instead.....that's so cool!! I luv poems that when u read it, u say "that's exactly how I was feeling, I just didn't know how to put it into words." & this poem did that for me. keep up the good work!!
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 20th, 2006, 4:19 pm ] |
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Thanks. I honestly feel kind of sorry for you if that's the way you feel... I know what it's like. lol. But I have found after talking to a few people that part of my trouble was I was thinking to much inwardly... so it's got better now. Granted the pain will never go away completely.... |
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