Agree Enyalië_Vandarya... I am not a qualified critic by any means but I do like it.
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| Author: | Shadowstorm [ February 16th, 2006, 5:12 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Silver Snowflake.. |
( Making this up on the spot...so...do forgive me. ^_^; ) Frozen cerulean, such a vibrant embrace of colour to harsh drained white. Gentle words halted, stolen away As the blizzard encases the echo. Ah, how beautiful you are, Against ice, your eyelashes frosted by a kiss of an angel. With nought but the touch of an artist, You lie, so perfect forever. Forgive me, my love, forgive me as crimson stains in streaks. Sleep my love, and never wake. Sleep, my silver snowflake. |
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| Author: | Enyalië_Vandarya [ February 16th, 2006, 11:31 pm ] |
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I like it...Not that I'm a qualified critic of course, but it captures the emotion, and you use some powerful language. |
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| Author: | Witch_King_of_Angmar [ February 16th, 2006, 11:32 pm ] |
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wonderful, it's very vivid |
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| Author: | Shadowstorm [ February 17th, 2006, 5:37 am ] |
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Thank you, to both of you. I really appreciate the comments, and I do so love writing poetry. I feel on a poem roll at the moment actually, so more will likely appear. -smiles- |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 17th, 2006, 4:09 pm ] |
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Agree Enyalië_Vandarya... I am not a qualified critic by any means but I do like it.
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| Author: | Seral [ February 17th, 2006, 7:46 pm ] |
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Ah, darling, its simply swoonable^^ *huggles* |
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| Author: | Shadowstorm [ February 23rd, 2006, 12:54 pm ] |
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^ Thank you again. -smiles- Swoonable, hm? It's slightly ..sadistic. Although, I meant it to sound as such...does it sound evil? |
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| Author: | Ivreniel [ February 23rd, 2006, 8:13 pm ] |
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It is definately very descriptive. Good job! |
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| Author: | Seral [ February 28th, 2006, 8:29 am ] |
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Very evil, darling. *grins* I believe that's where the swoonability comes in... *shifty eyes* I think it's the thought that evil must have a hidden side that makes it so. But yes, very sadistic and evil. ^__^ |
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| Author: | Arien Elensar [ March 1st, 2006, 3:29 am ] |
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Love the lanugage. Very sharp and vibrant. |
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| Author: | Kess [ March 1st, 2006, 11:50 am ] |
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Thats beautiful! What else can I say? |
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