Jikes! That ís a bad poem
exactly as the title said, by the way. So I guess there's nothing wrong in it.
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 25th, 2006, 7:56 am ] |
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A Haze On Reality A haze on reality Mystic blue eyes Gaze deep into mine Moon stare Fatal glare Crying on the shoulder of reality A haze on reality ----------------------------------------------- Ok, heres another - took me 5 seconds. Playing in the Snow Spiralling deep out of society Dissolusioning reality Cheating mortality Creating serenity Losing our dignity We play in the snow (v. bad poem i know!) |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 25th, 2006, 8:01 am ] |
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Their good, I think I know which boy the first ones about! The second one is clever! |
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 25th, 2006, 1:17 pm ] |
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it's about william moseley actually! |
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| Author: | Kess [ March 26th, 2006, 6:43 am ] |
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So is it a "haze on reality" cos he'll probably never even meet you? |
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 26th, 2006, 6:48 am ] |
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yep - you got it girl! |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 27th, 2006, 3:53 pm ] |
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Oh I thought it was the "other" blue-eyed boy-God I'm obsessed! Its still good tho! |
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| Author: | Eyalan [ March 27th, 2006, 3:56 pm ] |
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Jikes! That ís a bad poem exactly as the title said, by the way. So I guess there's nothing wrong in it.
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 27th, 2006, 5:24 pm ] |
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wrong in what? |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 28th, 2006, 1:11 pm ] |
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Eyalan wrote: Jikes! That ís a bad poem
exactly as the title said, by the way. So I guess there's nothing wrong in it.I thought it was good, but some didn't rhyme well! |
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 28th, 2006, 1:53 pm ] |
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it wasn't sposed to rhyme btw. only Moon stare, fatal glare |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 28th, 2006, 3:05 pm ] |
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No the PLaying in the Snow one! Only CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISM ALLOWED No NASTY COMMENTS! |
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 28th, 2006, 3:34 pm ] |
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that one wasn't realy meant to either, only they all were sposed to finish in ty. Quotes Susan: 'you know that doesn't really rhyme...' |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 28th, 2006, 3:36 pm ] |
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Oh, erm... wots it called... Poetic lisence! |
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| Author: | WML is Broken__* [ March 28th, 2006, 3:42 pm ] |
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hmmmm... i dont have much of that... i'm good at doing like normal joyful poems but not sad ones |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ March 28th, 2006, 3:45 pm ] |
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Poetic License is when u can change rules to fit ure poem like word endings, sentence structure etc. |
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