OK, i can't believe I'm posting this, but I am. *takes deep breath* OK, so I've been getting more & more into poetry lately. We've all read Jax Nova's awesome poems (which, believe me, this is not NEAR as good.) & they've inspired me to write. Well, I've tried writing poetry before, & it didn't work out so good. I'm open for criticism, help, spelling/grammar errors, w/e to help me.... So erm, ya......here we go....

The Past
A poem by: pip&leggyluvr

The past.
It’s already happened.
It’s already gone.
It’s lost.
And yet,
on it we still dwell.
Wondering,
had we changed it,
what would have happened?
Wishing,
if we could change it,
would it matter?
And in doing so,
Losing,
the time that is now.
Not looking forwards,
but always back.

The past.
It’s already happened.
It’s already gone.
It’s lost.
And yet,
on it we still dwell.
Remembering,
the happy times,
the times that were good.
Wishing,
to go back,
and visit those times again.
And in doing so,
Saddening,
the time that is now.
Making it seem
so much worse,
than perhaps it really is.

The past.
It’s already happened.
It’s already gone.
It’s lost.
And yet,
on it we still dwell.
Missing
the present,
and the future.

The past.
Memories of something
that once existed
but no longer does.

The past
confuses
and consumes
Many.
Does it you?

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

Nice job. I, with all honesty, think it was a nicely writen poem. Very good subject in my opinion as well.

The only thing I could say negative about it is that it did not ryme a lot but that is a personal prefferance and there is no "Should or shouldn't ryme"

Nice job.

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I like the fact that it doesn't rhyme. It makes the poem flow without seams.
I prefer poems where the author hasn't searched for a rhyming word, and put the poem out of context.

Very well written.

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"Anyone who lives within their means suffers from a lack of imagination" - Oscar Wilde

Wow, thanks u guys!! I didn't think it was that good. lol
Ya, i know wut u mean ShadowStorm.....I like poems that don't rhyme, too. b/c 4 a lot of ppl (not u of course, Jax, b/c ur so good @ it!!! *glares @ jax* ) kind of force a rhym, & it doesn't work. But in all honesty, I'm just not talented enough to try & get the right words & make it rhym!!! lol Thanks for the input on it, though, I appreciate it.

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

Well, that's not egsactily a bad thing. And some people, as evident by ShadowStorm, like it better without ryms.

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lol. ya, good thing, huh??

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

Yeah it's a good thing. After all what would the world be like if everyone was the same?! ...

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that was good pip

thanks,Kinduali.



yuck.......very boring. lol that would be no fun.....Oh gosh, if every1 was just like me?!?!?! scary thought. 8)

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

lol yeahI would hate it if everyone was the same!

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Wow, that's beautiful! I love it!!

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We've been forever
yet we've only just begun.
We have come full circle.

thanks.

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

Well done pip&leggyluvr. I love the subject and the repetition you used. I also thought it was well written. Keep it up!

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AWESOME set by the AMAZING Lembas!!!

thanks!

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."

*grins* told ya you weren't as bad as you said you were.

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*shrugs* I guess not. I hadn't really tried in a while......I mean, i read LotR, & really paid attention 2 thepoetry & luved it, & then my friend told me HE wrote poetry, & then i joined this site & met u, & all of that was a big inspiration for me 2 start, & well, ya.... Still not as good as u, though.

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"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."