Not horible, infact I liked it!
You got good ryming in there. nice job.
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| Author: | Galadriel of Lothlorien [ June 2nd, 2006, 11:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Eternity (a poem) |
Ok everybody. I know it sucks and all but i thought i would put it down anyways so here goes. This poem is called Eternity. Eternity I lie in bed at night and pray, that you will think of me. I cry until my eyelids close, And dream- eternity I wake to sunlight on my face, and for a moment i forget. Then a cloud passes by, And i realize this is it. I carry on through out the day, feigning joy, and feeling pain. I long to gaze upon your face, and share a smile, and embrace. The day is drawing to an end, and still i think of you. I try to relax yet in my mind, i wonder what to do. So now i lay me down to sleep, I pray the lord, My soul will keep. And should by chance you remember me, Know that I love you- eternally |
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| Author: | Galadriel of Lothlorien [ June 3rd, 2006, 12:26 pm ] |
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So was it horrible or what? Post your comments if you like. |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ June 3rd, 2006, 1:20 pm ] |
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Not horible, infact I liked it! You got good ryming in there. nice job.
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| Author: | Galadriel of Lothlorien [ June 4th, 2006, 9:57 am ] |
| Post subject: | My poem |
Gee thanks!!!! 
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| Author: | Envied Alexander [ June 7th, 2006, 9:56 pm ] |
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i really like it, if i ever get around to writeing this fan fic i've been tossing around, do you think you could help me? as Jax said about the ryming, i can't rhyme, so maybe you could help me out! i really like it! i want to hear more from you! |
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| Author: | Lady Elenriel [ June 7th, 2006, 10:51 pm ] |
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Your poem is lovely Kinduali. I agree with Jax-you are very good at rhyming. Great work and keep it up!
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| Author: | Galadriel of Lothlorien [ June 8th, 2006, 8:40 pm ] |
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Thanks ya'll and sure Princess Kade... just let me knnow |
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