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Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 3rd, 2006, 6:47 pm ] |
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I thought I would share my latest piece of meter and rhyme. Poetry is one of my major obsessions. Please give me some feedback. ![]() I gazed up at the painted sky. The clouds were pink and blue. Illuminated by the sun, They softly changed their hue. The sun dipped down, the moon came out With only half in sight. One part was dark, the other shown In crisp and shining white. And then I smiled in pleasant thought Recalling all our bliss, Because without the eyes of love I'd never notice this. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ |
Author: | Guest [ July 3rd, 2006, 8:04 pm ] |
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it's AWESOME! I adooore it! it's so cute... and honest... and loving.. and REAL! you're really, really talented! |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 3rd, 2006, 8:18 pm ] |
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Thank you very much. ![]() |
Author: | Guest [ July 4th, 2006, 2:40 pm ] |
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you're quite welcome, as I am only telling the truth ![]() |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 4th, 2006, 5:41 pm ] |
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My latest poem... a touch of humor if you need a laugh/smile. ![]() Getting Married "He stared at me and said, 'I'm getting married.' And that is when I cried and ran away. He shouted saying, 'No! Please don't. Please don't go!' But nothing in my heart could make me stay. I thought our love was true and ever lasting. He made me think perhaps he was 'the one.' I never thought that he would love another. I never thought that I was just for fun. I still remember when he said, 'I love you' And when he said, 'I'm yours forever more.' But now I see that he was just an actor. I never would have called him that before. Oh God! I can't believe our love has broken. I can't believe my dreams were all in vain. I can't believe that all the love between us Has vanished leaving nothing but this pain." "My Love," her lover said upon his entrance. "I'd never leave you. That I thought you knew. Now please let me conclude my heartfelt sentence. I stuttered but I meant to say, 'to you.'" |
Author: | Guest [ July 4th, 2006, 5:45 pm ] |
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lol, that's a funny one ![]() |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 17th, 2006, 4:49 pm ] |
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Here's my latest: Lustrous Ebony She danced amidst the willows (the finest specimen), Enthralled me by her beauty not of the race of men. Lustrous hair of ebony against her olive back And eyes of blue that muted her velvet coat of black. Just then she heard the crackle of leaves beneath my feet. She turned to me - lips parted - as my heart skipped a beat. Half animal, half woman, she coyly trotted near And stroked my face so coolly, this bliss was mixed with fear For she was tall above me. Her touch was warm yet cold, Her nature was seducing, and she was strong and bold. And as her lips drew closer I thought of all the tales That all the wise would tell us - where evil would prevail. But I could not withdraw myself and when her lips touched mine The feeling was unearthly, so thrilling, and divine. But as the kiss continued I felt her steal my breath; Yet then I saw her crying as I could sense my death. And now she pulls me closer to kiss me one last time But this unearthly pleasure feels now to be a crime... Oh! now suddenly I feel a change within my heart And I no longer feel that my soul will soon depart. I open up my eyes from that kiss and then I see There's a smile on the face framed by the lustrous ebony. |
Author: | Guest [ July 19th, 2006, 7:35 am ] |
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Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 19th, 2006, 10:23 am ] |
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Thanks! ![]() ![]() |
Author: | Guest [ July 19th, 2006, 1:11 pm ] |
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I see ![]() ![]() |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 19th, 2006, 2:07 pm ] |
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You should check out Allpoetry.com. That's where most of my reading comes in and then I can get a lot of feedback on my stuff too. ![]() |
Author: | Guest [ July 19th, 2006, 2:15 pm ] |
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Oh, thanks ![]() |
Author: | Annabel Lee [ July 21st, 2006, 11:12 am ] |
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Very Beautiful poetry Frodfan!!! i love it!!! |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 23rd, 2006, 10:30 am ] |
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Thank you. Here is a song I recently wrote... I may act like I hate you from time to time And treat you as if you're not worth a dime, Or just find sometimes that you don't understand, Sense you're not willing to lend me a hand. But when I see your face after our spats - it's then That I Fall in love Again.... Because when you're there in front of me It's then that I can clearly see... And I know that I Love you deep inside And I fall in love again. And I may decide that I despise your face While feeling in my heart you have no place... Because you couldn't comprehend my pain And blotted out the sunshine with your rain. But when I rest my tired head down to sleep - it's then That I Fall in love Again... Because you come to me in my dreams... In the light of the pale moon beams And I See what I Feel deep down inside And I fall in love again. |
Author: | Guest [ July 24th, 2006, 4:13 pm ] |
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Aww, it's pretty ![]() |
Author: | FRODOFAN [ July 24th, 2006, 4:33 pm ] |
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Thanks. I called it, "I Fall In Love Again." |
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