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Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 23rd, 2006, 6:09 pm ] |
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Ok, so i havent finished this one......I wrote it like a month ago, & i wanted to write more....but nothing would cum to me. ![]() ![]() On the outside everything seemed fine. Of all the pain and confusion, I showed no sign. Everyone believed the lie that life was simple for me. They didn’t even take the time to look for themselves and see. It was then that I met him. He seemed to understand all that confusion, and all that pain; that my life was not so grand. |
Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 24th, 2006, 4:36 pm ] |
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It's good so far, but I'm not sure where it should go either. ![]() ![]() |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 24th, 2006, 6:21 pm ] |
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ok, thanks!! ![]() |
Author: | Jax Nova [ July 25th, 2006, 11:32 am ] |
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hey, nice job. ![]() And a strikingly acurate discription of most of my life in many ways. lol |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 25th, 2006, 3:34 pm ] |
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lol. thanks. any suggestions on where to go w/ it next? ![]() |
Author: | Jax Nova [ July 27th, 2006, 11:11 am ] |
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well, in my opinion I would say somewhere like showing how even through the troubles and boredome of life that life can be good. Something like that. But like I said that's just my opinin. It's your poem dow what ya like. ![]() |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 27th, 2006, 1:57 pm ] |
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thanks Jax!!! ![]() |
Author: | lady_E [ July 27th, 2006, 4:16 pm ] |
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It's great, but maybe it should have been longer and more detailed..other from that it was bril ![]() |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 27th, 2006, 4:17 pm ] |
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*nods* I'm working on making it longer....but thanks 4 the input anyway!! ![]() OK, wut do u guys think of this stanza next? He was like an angel That’d been sent from above. He showed me compassion; He showed me how to love. |
Author: | lady_E [ July 27th, 2006, 4:37 pm ] |
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That's so sweet, i love it ![]() |
Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 27th, 2006, 6:40 pm ] |
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Yes, I like it. ![]() |
Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 27th, 2006, 6:41 pm ] |
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Yes, I like it. ![]() |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 28th, 2006, 10:58 am ] |
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u think so? thanks guys. i'm working on more.... |
Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 28th, 2006, 2:02 pm ] |
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Good. I can't wait to see where you go with it. ![]() |
Author: | pip&leggyluvr [ July 28th, 2006, 5:59 pm ] |
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yea, me 2. lol ![]() |
Author: | Jax Nova [ August 1st, 2006, 10:30 am ] |
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I like that stanza as well. ![]() |
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