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Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 23rd, 2006, 6:09 pm ]
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Ok, so i havent finished this one......I wrote it like a month ago, & i wanted to write more....but nothing would cum to me. :( I'm not really sure where to go w/ it from here.... any suggestions on wut 2 write about after these 3 stanzas is appreciated!!! :-P Tell me wut u think...



On the outside
everything seemed fine.
Of all the pain and confusion,
I showed no sign.

Everyone believed the lie
that life was simple for me.
They didn’t even take the time
to look for themselves and see.

It was then that I met him.
He seemed to understand
all that confusion, and all that pain;
that my life was not so grand.

Author:  ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 24th, 2006, 4:36 pm ]
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It's good so far, but I'm not sure where it should go either. :( I'll let you know if I think of something though. :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 24th, 2006, 6:21 pm ]
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ok, thanks!! :-D

Author:  Jax Nova [ July 25th, 2006, 11:32 am ]
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hey, nice job. :)

And a strikingly acurate discription of most of my life in many ways. lol

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 25th, 2006, 3:34 pm ]
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lol. thanks. any suggestions on where to go w/ it next? :confused:

Author:  Jax Nova [ July 27th, 2006, 11:11 am ]
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well, in my opinion I would say somewhere like showing how even through the troubles and boredome of life that life can be good. Something like that.

But like I said that's just my opinin. It's your poem dow what ya like. :) I am sure it will turn out great.

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 27th, 2006, 1:57 pm ]
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thanks Jax!!! :-D

Author:  lady_E [ July 27th, 2006, 4:16 pm ]
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It's great, but maybe it should have been longer and more detailed..other from that it was bril :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 27th, 2006, 4:17 pm ]
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*nods* I'm working on making it longer....but thanks 4 the input anyway!! :-D

OK, wut do u guys think of this stanza next?


He was like an angel
That’d been sent from above.
He showed me compassion;
He showed me how to love.

Author:  lady_E [ July 27th, 2006, 4:37 pm ]
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That's so sweet, i love it :)

Author:  ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 27th, 2006, 6:40 pm ]
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Yes, I like it. :)

Author:  ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 27th, 2006, 6:41 pm ]
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Yes, I like it. :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 28th, 2006, 10:58 am ]
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u think so? thanks guys. i'm working on more....

Author:  ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 28th, 2006, 2:02 pm ]
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Good. I can't wait to see where you go with it. :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ July 28th, 2006, 5:59 pm ]
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yea, me 2. lol :-D i'll post more when I do.

Author:  Jax Nova [ August 1st, 2006, 10:30 am ]
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I like that stanza as well. :) Let us know when you update it!

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