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Post subject: Do you appreciate the present? Posted: January 1st, 2007, 2:29 pm |
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Joined: 03 July 2005 Posts: 9846 Location: city that never sleeps
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I was on vacation this Christmas to Texas, the state I arrived to when I first entered America as a Chinese immigrant. This poem was inspired when I paid a visit to my hometown.
Critique welcome!
Do you appreciate the present? Do you appreciate the life? We languish in our insularity The empty illusion of what we lack So shall you flounder in enticing lies?
Standing in that courtyard of fragile promises Seeing the sullen sky reflected in peeling paint A dry swimming pool drowning in dirt and weeds The cold balconies where I used to run Am I blinded by the inferior? For, even then, I dwelled in the life Even then, I was happy
Do you appreciate the now? Only when faced by the sacrifices of yesterday When doused in the past's raw truth Do we realize What are the infinitesimal steps of the present That take us to our futures?
A humble home A humble town How can I now disdain the meager When so faced by my own provident hopes? Was this the nascence of my dreams? Was this the dawn of my future? That day I watched an unpromising sun Bathe in overcast shadows Meek apartments Modest shopping plazas Those striving souls so similar to the yesterday of mine And for the first time in eons I witnessed the sunrise
Do you appreciate the present? Do you appreciate the life? Do you dance in those simple dreams That define the current bliss? Or do you drown in those demons of envy That whisper of all that you lack? Because the past brings us to the now And the now does not endure for eternity
I dare you to live your life
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Post subject: Posted: January 1st, 2007, 2:34 pm |
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Joined: 28 June 2005 Posts: 2310 Location: USA
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Wow, that's really deep! I really like it. It has a really strong meaning to it and I love the ending. I can't think of anything bad about it. I love it!
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Post subject: Posted: January 1st, 2007, 6:58 pm |
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Joined: 03 January 2006 Posts: 13134 Location: Canada Country:
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thats really deep( blah, i know cliche), its also really good...i cant find anything wrong with it...
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