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Post subject: Tell Me, (Rated PG 13)  Posted: May 27th, 2008, 10:30 am |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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(No offense but don't ask where this came from... because to be blunt... you won't get an answer)
Are you a demon of my own,
Your bloody claws on my throat?
Have I sat while you have grown,
Playing ever, deaths cold note?
Your a witch, a wizard,
A black blight on life.
Your a serpent, your a lizard,
Your deaths sharpened knife.
Rip your skin, break your bone,
Stab my heart, cut my throat.
I'll weigh you down, with a stone,
While I'm on top, in my boat.
Drown now, my precious curse.
Drown your vile filth in day.
You killed me... or even worse,
Now it's time that I repay.
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Post subject: Posted: June 6th, 2008, 9:11 am |
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eerily good.
_________________  Faith isn't the ability to believe long and far into the misty future.
It's simply taking God at His Word and taking the next step Joni Erickson Tada
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Post subject: Posted: June 6th, 2008, 10:22 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks for the comment.  Glad you liked it.
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Post subject: Posted: June 21st, 2008, 11:13 pm |
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Joined: 03 June 2005
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Location: Heaven: Rockin' with Severus Snape
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Slightly disturbing... but in a good way. 'Twas very well written.
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Post subject: Posted: June 27th, 2008, 5:19 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks for the comments Larael and Aerlinn.
Glad you liked them ( mostly) 
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Post subject: Posted: June 27th, 2008, 10:08 pm |
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Joined: 03 June 2005
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Oh, no, don't get me wrong. I like it and thought it well written. It was just a bit more morbid than I thought it'd be.
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Post subject: Posted: June 30th, 2008, 10:48 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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It's fine, I agree with you actually.
It is quite dark... but my stuff tends to turn out that way when I am in certain moods. *shrugs*
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Post subject: Posted: June 30th, 2008, 8:55 pm |
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Joined: 25 November 2005
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Location: I'm everywhere at once. I am currently lost in the land of quotes.
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I agree with what others have said...it's a bit dark and mysterious, but it's still quite good poetry. Good work!
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Post subject: Posted: July 1st, 2008, 11:11 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks Appreciate the comments as always
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Post subject: Posted: July 4th, 2008, 11:03 pm |
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I absolutely love this.
i mean yeah, it's got that morbid darkish feeling to it, but we all have the side to us, and it's nice to read something that can expres it. Beautifully written. As always, you rock at life, my dear. _________________ 
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: July 8th, 2008, 11:37 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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lol thanks pip. Glad you liked it, as always and thanks for the comment.
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Post subject: Posted: July 8th, 2008, 4:32 pm |
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my pleasure. _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: July 8th, 2008, 6:11 pm |
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It's morbid... and kind of scary... yet fasinating at the same time... I had to read it a second time, don't know why.
It's well written! I get the notion of a ghost trying to kill his/her killer and succeding... lol.
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Post subject: Posted: July 9th, 2008, 2:11 pm |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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lol yeah, I can see how you would come up with that.
Thanks for the comment as always.
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