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PostPosted: January 4th, 2007, 9:47 am 
Istari
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She shivers in the sun
She trusts no one but everyone
Her eyes are shut but she sees the same as us
Her mind is free and that's enough
She stays forever in her safe place
Where she has no dark fears to chase
She and her enemies are like fire and water
When she starts, no one can stop her
She's like a cloud in the sky
It floats and never stops to say goodbye.


It's nothing special, but I'd love to hear your opinions.


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I liked it actually. :) I thought it was very captivating in a strane sort of way. Really has good imagry to it as well. :)

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Travelling Shieldmaiden
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You poem is great Bubble Black. It has a mysterious vibe to it. As Jax mentioned, the imagery is also very good. Keep it up! :-D

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