Wow, that's very nice and very well written. This is a very lovely piece of art.
Nice flow and I like the repetativeness of the "Every time I see you"
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| Author: | Arya Undomiel [ February 22nd, 2007, 4:58 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Every Time I See You [a poem] |
Every time I see you you're the only thing I see more real than anything I know yet stranger than anyone else I can hardly stop my thoughts Every time I see you Every time I see you I get so confused not knowing what's in your mind nor even what's in mine circles spin within circles Every time I see you Every time I see you I have to stop myself from being swept away with the flow of the endless river that sweeps on day by day Every time I see you Every time I see you I can't do a single thing afaraid to think afaraid to speak afaraid you'll fade away Every time I see you Every time I see you I can't make up my mind take the plunge and plumet down turn around and don't look back or linger in between Every time I see you |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ February 23rd, 2007, 3:39 pm ] |
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Wow, that's very nice and very well written. This is a very lovely piece of art. Nice flow and I like the repetativeness of the "Every time I see you"
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| Author: | Arya Undomiel [ February 25th, 2007, 7:13 pm ] |
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^Thanks for the compliments. I actually just decided to keep repeating 'Every time I see you' since I couldn't work out a way to connect the different parts of the poem... 
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