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A Poem For My Mom(G)
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Author:  Risestel [ April 7th, 2007, 3:33 pm ]
Post subject:  A Poem For My Mom(G)
I wrote this about 2 years ago, and I know its really in its beginning stages, but I'm going to post it anyway. comments appreciated. :-D

Mom,
Beside you I walked,
Beside you I talked,
You helped me mature and grow,
So why did you have go?

What were you thinking?
When your thoughts were sinking?
Did you worry about me?
Did you wonder about how I was going to be?

On the day you died,
I sat beside you and cried.
I never knew how much I needed you,
Until the day life would not see you through.

Several years past the day,
My thoughts are no longer gray,
My life has growing happiness,
And I'll never see the end of this.

Part of me keeps you locked away,
To where once in a while my thoughts will stray,
because you were like no other,
because you were my mother.
Author:  Guest [ April 7th, 2007, 5:11 pm ]
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Oh wow! that is really good.....did your mother really die? :(

good job. ;) it rhymed and flowed well. 5 stars. :)
Author:  Risestel [ April 7th, 2007, 10:34 pm ]
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:-D Thank you,
and yes, she did die. I was four and she was 23. :confused:
Author:  Jax Nova [ April 8th, 2007, 1:08 pm ]
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That's very lovely! :) It is sad but lovely. Thanks for sharing and nice write.
Author:  Risestel [ April 8th, 2007, 8:11 pm ]
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Thank you.
Author:  bow_and_arrow [ April 9th, 2007, 3:37 am ]
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I'm sorry, Risestel. That poem is so lovely.
Author:  Risestel [ April 9th, 2007, 10:27 am ]
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Author:  Lasbelingur [ April 25th, 2007, 11:12 am ]
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Sorry, but that was a great peom.
Author:  Elenthari [ April 25th, 2007, 11:14 am ]
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Oh,I'm really sorry Risestel :(
Your poem is great!I have no words!
Author:  Envied Alexander [ April 25th, 2007, 4:39 pm ]
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Stunningly beautiful, my friend! You really nailed the bitter-sweet feeling, which is one that pulls extra hard on my heartstrings.

A lovely poem that you should be very proud of indeed.
Author:  Risestel [ April 26th, 2007, 6:42 pm ]
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Thank you, everyone, I honestly thought it wasn't all that good, though my opinion has changed a bit. Thanks for the comments.
Author:  The Nightingale [ April 30th, 2007, 12:12 pm ]
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It's very beautiful, Risetel. Beautiful things often come from trials.
Author:  Risestel [ May 1st, 2007, 5:41 pm ]
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Thank you Nightingale.
Author:  Dark, Queen of Angmar [ May 12th, 2007, 3:09 pm ]
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aww, *huggles* i'm so sorry for your loss, but this is an amzing poem.
Author:  Risestel [ May 12th, 2007, 5:33 pm ]
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Sometimes sadness is where the best works come from, because there is normally a happier conclusion.
Thanks for your comment.
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