This is good! Really capture's Will's feelings nicely. *applauds*
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| Author: | Renji's Howl [ May 27th, 2007, 2:18 pm ] |
| Post subject: | For Will Turner (PG-13) |
Here is a poem I wrote about 40 minutes after seeing PotC: AWE. Please comment. Sword in chest Lifes-bloods on the deck, I rasp my last breaths As my sight fades unchecked. Elizabeth's crying Jack rough hand takes mine, Around a dagger hilt my fingers bind. Thoughts scrambled, lifting up is my hand, cold dagger blade driving into his heart's land. Rushing of water a knife stuck in me Heart is pride out replacing the beat. Into the Abyss the captain goes. The ship falls too in the sunset gold. But I'm not dead, just gone beyond. In the flash of green my heart lives on. |
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| Author: | Ánië Súrion [ May 28th, 2007, 11:19 pm ] |
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This is good! Really capture's Will's feelings nicely. *applauds*
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| Author: | SynysterFreak23 [ June 1st, 2007, 6:30 pm ] |
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Oh my gosh..............that was breath-taking. I almost cried it was so awesome! Bravo! |
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| Author: | Renji's Howl [ June 1st, 2007, 10:33 pm ] |
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Thanks, Will's 'death' moment was still fresh in my mind when I wrote it, I think that is why it turned out like that. I almost cryed writing it. |
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| Author: | Ánië Súrion [ June 1st, 2007, 11:02 pm ] |
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This is off-topic but...your top banner is awesome. I love that quote. 
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| Author: | Renji's Howl [ June 2nd, 2007, 11:23 am ] |
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Thanks, Kemen made it. |
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| Author: | Drew's Destiny [ June 8th, 2007, 6:43 pm ] |
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Oh that poem is beutiful! I really like how it was from Will's point of view and I think that it flows amazingly well. Wonderful, wonderful job! |
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| Author: | Rose of Rivendell [ June 9th, 2007, 11:05 am ] |
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I haven't seen AWE yet, but your poem is really, really good. It gives you a really good impression of what Will must feel at this moment. Good job!
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| Author: | *~Pirate_Lord_of_Narnia~* [ June 13th, 2007, 2:24 pm ] |
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Wow! This is a really great peom! It really captures Will's feelings and isn't to complicated to understand...if you get my meaning...well done!
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| Author: | Renji's Howl [ June 14th, 2007, 12:43 pm ] |
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Thanks, to all of you. |
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