Hey, read the poem. I liked it, it's very interesting in a good way.

i liked the whole feel and it's a fairly nice flow also.

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Not bad Aerlinn. Created an appropriate atmosphere.Peronsally, I prefer more classical rhyming schemes (like a 1,2,1,2 ) but it still works for the theme .

Well done.

Berek

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"This is the hour of the Shire-folk, when they arise from their quiet fields to shake the towers and counsels of the Great. Who of all the Wise could have foreseen it? Or, if they are wise, why should they expect to know it, until the hour has struck? "

When I talk about a rhyme scheme, I just mean the pattern of how it rhymes. So, in a verse where the first and third lines rhyme, and the 2nd and 4th rhyme, I call that a 1,2,1,2 rhyme scheme.

Classical rhyme schemes tend to be rigid ones e.g. 1,2,1,2 while more modern ones don't rhyme as frequently, or don't rhyme at all.

Make sense?

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"This is the hour of the Shire-folk, when they arise from their quiet fields to shake the towers and counsels of the Great. Who of all the Wise could have foreseen it? Or, if they are wise, why should they expect to know it, until the hour has struck? "

So you pretty much just picked up an arrow of fancy words, and threw it at the core of my soul. (that's a good thing )

I absolutely loved it. Seriously. because i can SOOO relate to the beautiful on the outside, depressed/hiding big huge morbid things on the inside guys, and this poem is so perfect, it's not even funny. So congrats. You're officially one of my favorite poets ever. I'll officially be seeking your stuff out, so keep writing.

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