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Post subject: "fade with the years" a poem of pain Posted: June 7th, 2006, 3:04 pm |
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Joined: 30 March 2006 Posts: 5406 Location: Alabama, USA
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I calm my fears, but I turn to tears, hoping that the pain will fade with the years, but for now I calm my fears, but turn to tears, with hope it will fade with the years...
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this is the first poem i've put to paper in i good bit of time, it is about a girl, who is riped from all that she knew, from all she has ever known, it is a poem about a girl, who has found her self lost in a world far bigger than her, about a girl, who is scared, and is trying to find her way, but she is trying to do it alone.
~Princess K.
_________________ <center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.” at one point, I was alejandrah.
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Post subject: Posted: June 7th, 2006, 3:37 pm |
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Joined: 15 March 2006 Posts: 4107 Location: The Square! LOL!
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Oh, repetiton, good. Not out-standing, no one is that good, but very good.
You spelt hoping wrong by the way!
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I saw you look away Is what you've seen too much to take, or are you blind and seeing nothing? (I saw you run) I saw you run away Is what I've done too much to take or are you scared of being nothing?
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Post subject: Posted: June 7th, 2006, 3:40 pm |
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Joined: 30 March 2006 Posts: 5406 Location: Alabama, USA
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ahh, i blame the lap top and my bad spelling, i spell better when i'm not usein' the lap top. and i wrote this at about 1 in the morning.... so i'm happy with it!
_________________ <center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.” at one point, I was alejandrah.
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Post subject: Posted: June 9th, 2006, 6:30 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005 Posts: 19521 Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Nice job I thought it was very nice! 
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Post subject: Posted: June 10th, 2006, 6:02 am |
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Joined: 24 June 2005 Posts: 3759 Location: Berlin Country:
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good job, nice poem
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Post subject: Posted: June 10th, 2006, 2:44 pm |
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Joined: 30 March 2006 Posts: 5406 Location: Alabama, USA
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thanks! (this would be a one word post!)
_________________ <center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.” at one point, I was alejandrah.
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Post subject: Posted: June 11th, 2006, 12:16 am |
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Joined: 30 March 2006 Posts: 2880 Location: Tejas Country:
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WEll I like it I am sone to put on new poems on hre. Ones that you have not even heard Kade. ALot of the same subject lines as my one about the girl with AIDS but no AIDS. I love your poem Kade.
_________________ "Holmes is a little too scientific for my tastes -- it approaches to cold-bloodedness"
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Post subject: Posted: June 11th, 2006, 7:51 pm |
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Joined: 30 March 2006 Posts: 5406 Location: Alabama, USA
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thanksies Leaha!
_________________ <center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.” at one point, I was alejandrah.
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Post subject: Posted: June 14th, 2006, 8:51 am |
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*nods and claps* Very good. Short, but the repetion gives it some real punch. Enjoyed reading it lots. 
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