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Post subject: A Dream  Posted: October 7th, 2006, 5:20 pm |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
Posts: 9566
Location: Austria
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Here's a poem I just wrote... Read it and tell me what you think of it, please!
A Dream
Sleep took me,
I fell into a never ending tunnel,
Bottomless and dark.
But somehow I knew you were there,
In my dreams.
I looked around,
I saw your shadow,
Standing not far away.
I smiled at you,
felt safe and warm.
I reached out for your hand,
Wanted you to hold me,
Wished this moment never to end.
We stood for an eternity,
Looking at each other.
But every eternity ends sometime,
All light faded, it got dark,
You drifted away.
I woke up, not willing to open my eyes,
Knowing that you won’t be there.
Already I missed you,
Wished that I went back,
Back into my dream.
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Last edited by Lady Erana on October 8th, 2006, 9:44 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Post subject: Posted: October 7th, 2006, 5:35 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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aw, that's so sad! & so true!!  I luv it! I can relate....idk wut else 2 say, just that's it so sad & sweet! u did an awesome job of conveying the feelings.....keep it up!!  8) _________________ 
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: October 7th, 2006, 5:39 pm |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
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Location: Austria
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Again... Thank you!!!  _________________ <center>
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Post subject: Posted: October 7th, 2006, 5:40 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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again...ur welcum!!!! lol  _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: October 7th, 2006, 6:24 pm |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
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Location: Austria
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Just couldn't stop thinking about a similar dream, so I just began to write and this came out! _________________ <center>
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Post subject: Posted: October 8th, 2006, 9:45 am |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
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Location: Austria
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I changed the poem a bit, nothing serious... Just to tell you. _________________ <center>
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Post subject: Posted: October 16th, 2006, 6:37 pm |
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Joined: 04 June 2005
Posts: 4599
Location: Zeh Shire
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This is really great!
Totally relatable to a dream I had the other night (with my lovely crush present in it) I really didn't want to wake up, this is awsome, kudos!
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Post subject: Posted: October 25th, 2006, 1:48 pm |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
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Location: Austria
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lol Exactly what my poem was referring to! Thank you! _________________ <center>
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Post subject: Posted: October 25th, 2006, 6:31 pm |
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Joined: 09 September 2006
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That was really beautiful and lovely and I really like your style ^_^
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Post subject: Posted: October 26th, 2006, 3:54 am |
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Joined: 03 November 2005
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Location: Austria
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Thank you! 
Can't stop laughing about it, I just write down my thoughts on a special topic and don't think about rhymes or what it sounds like...  _________________ <center>
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