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Post subject: Why would I? (PG)  Posted: November 28th, 2006, 6:02 pm |
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Why would I care
if you fell? Why
would I weep
if you passed
away? You
wouldn't do the same
for me..so why would
I do the same for you?
I'm not being mean,
I'm just being fair,
but I guess It's wrong
of me, to think
so foolishy.
It doesn't matter
if you hate me,
it doesn't matter
if you dont care about
me. In the end
it wont seem to
matter, but yes,
it shall matter.
Ill think of you
next time you fall.
Ill think of you when
you go to the grave.
And I'll mourn over
you with a flood
of tears, and I wont care
if you did the same for me.
Because it will matter...
in the
end.
Last edited by Guest on December 6th, 2006, 7:27 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post subject: Posted: November 29th, 2006, 8:34 pm |
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Please put a rating for your poem! Thank you!
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Post subject: Posted: November 29th, 2006, 8:43 pm |
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Post subject: Posted: November 29th, 2006, 9:27 pm |
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.... Check the top of the section.
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Post subject: Posted: December 4th, 2006, 10:47 pm |
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Very interesting poem, True Narnian. When I started reading it I must admit I didn't feel very happy, and then it went on, carrying me with it---it's great! It seemed good enough to be the lyrics to some song.
(psst--I'd recom. either G or PG.)
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Post subject: Posted: December 6th, 2006, 7:27 pm |
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thanks Ivre  
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Post subject: Posted: December 7th, 2006, 3:12 pm |
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Ohhh, it's so very pretty.
Quite sad, but incredibly pretty.
It reads slightly strangely at the beginning, but I think this could fit to a song very very well.
You could try fitting music to it? It's definitely good enough.
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Post subject: Posted: December 7th, 2006, 5:31 pm |
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thanks Shadow. ...yes I could try that sometime. 
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Post subject: Posted: December 8th, 2006, 12:03 pm |
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You're absolutely welcome, of course. And if you do fit music to it anytime, I'd love to hear it! ^_^
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Post subject: Posted: December 8th, 2006, 5:22 pm |
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thank you..I love getting compliments on my writing work, considering I am working on a series of books, and hope to publish a book of my poems some day.
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Post subject: Re: Why would I? (PG) Posted: September 12th, 2025, 9:43 pm |
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